Hakim II Rifle(WIP) - Critique Welcome

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heyo guys been a while since I posted a project here, 

I'm trying to make a... "futurized" version of the Egyptian Hakim rifle,  so naturally it's a coil gun DMR thing(hence why it doesn't have a bolt loader)

If you see something wrong with it, don't hesitate to post about it, thanks.

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Added a charging handle(that's the correct term, not "bolt carrier"), I don't know what I was thinking when I said that "coil guns dont have bolt carriers!!1"

Did a bit of research on Coil guns, they actually don't need gas tubes, so I converted the gas tube to a... "heat compensation/bullet acceleration apparatus"

Blocked in a scope


and I forgot to add a trigger

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Made the scope, damn thing now makes the rest of the model look like shit


Added a "charging power port" thing

Changed the text, thinking of changing the name of the rifle entirely

Detailed the "heat sink" to make it more obvious that it was a heat sink

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Changed the stock
Added coils to the barrel on the front to hammer home that this is a coil gun
Removed the "حكيم" bit, as it felt a bit tacky
Softened up all the bevels 
Added a "power switch"
Added a "battery"
Shortened the clip to make it look more inline with the Original Hakim rifle


Okay, I'm pretty confident on the Highpoly, think I'm gonna low polinize(?)/UV map it and get texturing!

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Early render

Bake came out perfectly

I made a really simple texture to define a bit of material definition and later I'll get into the even more fun bits!

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Scope.png

....

eh
feeling lazy, here's another render

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Looking back at it, It doesn't look quite as great as I remember it being

but now, I'm giving it another go.