Rocket Girls Walk

pascalie · May 2018

Rocket Girls
Feedback to improve are welcome
Tahnks for Support

https://youtu.be/WS7PDrCKb4c

AGoodFella · May 2018

Upload to syncsketch please

pascalie · May 2018

Hello
here is the link syncsketch
https://syncsketch.com/playground/7a933a9fcfbf4223a5e78c7735d42af5#403501

pascalie · May 2018

hello guys
here is the new update of the shot
thanks for the feedback

https://youtu.be/chpas6Pj6rE

BoonS · May 2018

Narrative-wise, I'm gauging from the facial expression and the casual walking demeanor, that the character is on a duty but in a relaxed and almost carefree manner. If that's what you're going for, I think it expresses that fine. There's a number of avenues that you can pursue though if you want to create a more pronounced presentation piece.

-The way the character looks straight ahead at a specific camera kinda makes it dependent on external assets (that aren't there.) It'd be nice if the rocket girl can exist independently by having it look around for targets/danger as she's on a mission, doesn't have to change the carefree expression though.

-It's extra work but you can accentuate the presence of the carefree attitude but switching between states of a [discipline][duty][mission] mood and the [carefree][relaxed][daydreaming] mood. Like in one loop she's doing what she's doing now but then shakes here head a little and turn into CallofDuty™ grumpy and looking out for targets, and then alternating back to the first loop. It's just my personal preference though, but I imagine that contrast between two animation states would definitely give the piece more personality and help it pop out more.

Hope that's helpful.

pascalie · May 2018

ok thanks

Rocket Girls Walk

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