HEAJ Q3 Laureenna

KdS

Here is mine.

I'm of course in the same class than all the others.
I hope you'll enjoy and, of course, your critics will be welcome for we will all improve with the looks of exterior talented guys

CU soon with UT2K4

Toomas

Upper arms are way too thin, same goes to hips.
The texture looks really washed out (sorry cant be much more helpful, im not really good texture artist), and you could have mirrored most of it to save texture space.

And it would be WAY more easier to crit if you posted front and side view and wireframes. The easier it is to crit the more responses you get

Slash

Say hello to miss narrowhips! Give her some fat in that area! Her thighs are as toomas said, too thin. They are also way too short.

Other than that: ^^what he said^^

KdS

You're right Slash...

I do this tonight when I'm back home..

Hope you'll answer in mass

qubism

jesus christ she got her ass on the front ?!?!?!
haha

mhm i cannot really comment on that work.
texture wise u could add a bunch more details.
model wise it got issues that got pointed out i think

reference is the key

KdS

No, this is just I think the 3/4 position that does not render the shadow of the short...

But I can tell you that her ass is well at the back ^^

So...here are my wires and my side and front views.

Pliz keep on answering, I take good notes.

Notice that this is also of course my first work, don't hesitate to also tell what is going right with it.

Thx a lot and see you soon I hope.

front view

Side view

wires

head side wire

head front wire

KdS

excuse for flood but it seems my edit wireframes etc have drawn into others threads...

Let me hope you'll comment that edit once or twice.
It is really important for me to have advices and critics from people of experience.

Slipstream

The texturing is pretty nice considering its your first work.

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v416/temetry/drawover.jpg

Here's a drawover . . . and since it just illustrates what's already been said about the proportions I'll just talk about the wire frames.

IMO the entire body should be one mesh. That makes it alot easier to create a good flow with the polygons (which in turn saves polies, and helps to establish good shape.)

In some cases its better to have some elements of the body separate from each other of course, but I think that having the entire mesh like that is unnecessary.

KDR_11k

Slipstream: Those hands are a bit too big.

Sean McBride

This is probobly one of the better HEAJ models ive seen so far. The head looks pretty good. I see you fixed your proportions while skinning after relizing they were off. Over all its pretty good stuff. Poop (www.poopinmymouth.com) has some great tutorials videos that I would suggest to any of you guys. Keep on going man.

Slipstream

@KDR: Oops. That always happens me ^^;