portfolio v2.0 crits please

Phaeton1911

ok i moved site to weebly after recomendation from felixenfeu, yeah this place is way better.

http://jamestowneportfolio.weebly.com/


i still seem to have a big chunk of empty space on either side but its a big improvement.
my page headers should be customized properly but i don't really have anything for that just yet.

also i know my CV is in some odd format not the standard microsoft word format, but that doesn't matter right now

DWalker

I'd get rid of the pop-up script when the viewer clicks an image and instead just go to a page with a larger version of the image. This will enable you to use much larger images; you've worked hard, so why not show off?

I'd streamline the main page to 4 images, each the size of your current banner - one for personal projects, and one for each of the games. When the user clicks on one, go to a separate page for that project. There's really no need for the separate banner; just use that image for your personal projects link.

The two lines of text below your banner don't really add anything useful, so just remove them. I'm all for text, but it should be something useful. On each of the project pages, feel free to talk about the images - how long it took, the size of the textures, number of polygons, target platform, etc.

Untextured models always read as unfinished projects. It's fine to include untextured models, especially to show hi- & low-poly models with the baked normal map, but you should also include a fully textured version.

You can combine your about & contact pages.

Your e-mail address, especially on the top of each page, should be a proper mailto: link so the viewers can just click on it to mail you.

Your first sentence in the about section has a comma splice and a missing article. You'll either need a conjunction or a period (or my favorite, a semi-colon; it can work as either a period or a comma, and allows for some really long sentences when bosses ask you to summarize your work in one sentence...) So, it could read: "I'm James Towne. I'm a 29-year old 3D artist living in the UK." or "I'm James Towne, a 29-year old..."; either approach would work. Overall, though, you should try to make the first section work as a single paragraph rather than multiple semi-related sentences. Don't be afraid to add extra blank lines between paragraphs, as it helps readability. Limit the number of fonts & point sizes; it looks as though you have 4 in the about section alone - one for the headers and one for the text should be enough.

White backgrounds are rather harsh; try a light or medium gray (as seen on some art forums...)

Optinium

Put your number at the top of every page along with your email and contact details

I'd also merge your 'About', 'Contact' and 'CV' into a single page I'd personally also get rid of a lot of the 'About' text, in most cases people don't care about you and your journey, it will rarely get read.

Finally I'd get rid of the text at the top of your main page, to 'cluttery' and distracting, let your art do the talking

Phaeton1911

alright now we're getting somewhere, these are the kind of small scale alterations that lets me know i'm getting close.
thanks guys

Felixenfeu

Way better ! Same as Optinium. Could merge these pages all together (Contact, about)