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Re: Creative Fantasy Writing
Just to add my tuppence worth : Watch your over-use of similes. Not everything has to be "like" something. Strip it back, edit the hell out of it. For example : "A trio of figures, fiery eyes smouldering, stood frozen in a titanic shadow that engulfed the land. " Metaphor tends to be shorter and better than simile, so use… -
Re: Creative Fantasy Writing
Hmm, rather than reading like a short story it feels like you're trying to force a standard epic fantasy novel onto one page, full of orcs, elves, magic, the whole shebang. That's cool, if this kind of stuff passes the time and you enjoy writing it by all means continue :) , but when i think of a short stories i'm usually… -
Re: Creative Fantasy Writing
Thanks Danshewan. Do you think it's just lazy that I haven't put particular things that explains why, for example, the lieutenant is anxious and whatnot? Do you think I have some sort of base that I could improve on? I'm still a student as of now as most of you know and I have had no real intention of continuing my writing… -
Re: Creative Fantasy Writing
Consider your pacing, and how that can be used as a tool to create and sustain interest. For example, the three paragraphs here deal with the first eighteen years of your character's life, and sure, this could work, but why not hint at his growing preoccupation with the occult, as opposed to flat-out telling us? Try and be… -
Re: Creative Fantasy Writing
If you are a starter, its an amezing work I tried to fix the second and third paragraph to make it more ancient and fantasy. Its tone is more modern than what fantasy should be. Like for example: Hez quoting "what the hell." If I remember correctly, there was only one book came close to writing this directly. As in "what… -
Re: Creative Fantasy Writing
Better than the first, feels a bit more thought out than before. It could do with a bit more detail, though, and you might want to look at creating a bit more transfer between your sentences; they feel more like independent statements than parts of a paragraph. If you can tie those sentences into a more cohesive structure… -
Re: Creative Fantasy Writing
Hm, interesting stuff Nitewalker : ) Yeah, that is actually my first peice. Thanks for the qoutes and examples
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