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Environment WIP: School House [Image Heavy]

Working on this school that's located about a block from my apartment. Trying to elevate this piece to portfolio quality so any and all critiques are greatly appreciated. Also using this model to work on sharpening my modular modeling and textural skills. Note: poly count in screens includes objects that haven't yet been reduced to lowpoly, School object itself is about 12,000 polys
Couple questions that I need to ask in addition to crits:
1) Is there a way to disable shadows from alpha planes alone w/o using raytraced shadows? Currently I've been working around this problem by detaching faces with alpha textures and excluding shadow casting from the lights.
2) Some of my faces though unwrapped and textured (See the bottom levels of the columns at the front of the school) remain plain and untextured though the faces around them function normally. I can fix this by deleting the faces and remaking/unwrapping them but I'm looking for a faster way to fix the issue.
Thanks!
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SchoolREnder2.jpg
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Texture sizes 2048x2048

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  • GOBEE
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    GOBEE polycounter lvl 10
    The scaling on your stairs are way off. They are too big in relation to the building size. Also, the front and side doors in relation to where the top floor windows are don't make sense. I think you need to work on clearly defining where the 1st floor ends and the 2nd floor begins. The handrails also seem too small/skinny.

    Bake out an ambient occlusion map to help make this look a bit more realistic. Keep working on this.
  • cholden
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    cholden polycounter lvl 18
    What's your target platform, RTS?

    Bricks have noticeable scale differences from face to face, and as GOBEE said, those stairs and handrails look wrong.
  • Cryocat
    thx for the crits guys, I'm getting to work on these issues and baking my AO map. Though I'm not sure about changing the locations of the windows as GOBEE said as currently they are almost exactly where they are in my reference building, which tells me that however it's done it works on the inside, probably a large foyer or something. Not sure yet.
    Thoughts?
  • Armanguy
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    Armanguy polycounter lvl 17
    looking good man keep going, i would try to add some personality to the piece though like graffitti at the sides garbage on the ground :)
  • Cody
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    Cody polycounter lvl 15
    Yo man. finally a thread for this beast. Agreed on the stairs, shrink 'em. The front door makes sense, it's a converted church right? Usually the front doors are ridiculously huge, just in case jesus is like 12 feet tall and decides to stop by. The side door, however, can be scaled down I think, because Yao Ming and Jesus will use the front door.

    Also, if you post a user viewport grab again, I will fly back to Richmond just to stab you in the neck. It makes it really hard to judge the scale of things, so never use the user view. Perspective only fool!

    And take a look at your bricks, man. They are way too big. The ones on that steeple are like 5 feet wide. Another thing...model those handrails. They are right there where the player would see them, so they are worth the polys imo. Speaking of polys, you could save some on the sign, triangle part of the roof, and the stairs on the side. I'll do a paintover for you later. Keep going man, it's looking good. Give some more love to the textures. And try looking at them with no lights to get a better idea. Last thing. Be sure to count the polys by triangles, not polygons. Peace!
  • GOBEE
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    GOBEE polycounter lvl 10
    Hey man.. it's just from what I am seeing from your screen shots. You have the reference so I could be wrong. To me, not knowing what the real building looks like, that's what my opinion was. If you post up your reference, I could probably get a better idea of where you were going with this. I'm not saying it looks bad, it all depends on how the interior is designed, I guess you walk in and maybe walk up a couple more steps? NO biggie if you feel the location of the windows are spot on. Post more shots when you can.

    Oh, I think what's most off about your handrails going up the stairs is the angle they are currently at. The handrails should be going up the same angle as the stairs.
  • Target_Renegade
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    Target_Renegade polycounter lvl 11
    The scene is there, there's the potential for this to be good. The pillars looks off, they're not straight enough, they camber too much. Doors seem to be offset too much, like the maps/UVs aren't lined up right.

    Some of the scale seems exagerated like the telegraph pole, it shouldn't that big. Generally with textures a bit of noise/dirt would look better, especially at the base of building.
  • Cryocat
    Thanks guys! Guess I really just needed a fresh set of eyes for a lot of this stuff.
    Working on a lot of the suggestions you threw at me, got the stairs a bit smaller, running my AO and I guess I'll build those handrails up a bit to make them more solid, I'll post some updates soon as some of these are done. Meanwhile heres a couple of my reference pics, though I'm obviously trying to age the building a bit more, or at least a bit grungier. It builds character, no? Oh and I decided Brick stairs are a pain in the ass.

    And cody... I might just post another user screen grab if that means when you come up here to stab me you bring my 13th Floor DVD back while yer at it... zing. Thanks all!
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  • cholden
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    cholden polycounter lvl 18
    If I were making this, it would help me to setup cameras at the same angle as the reference picture, recreate the ref as accurately as possible, then optimize while filling in the blanks.

    The powerlines clutter the scene a bit. I'd remove them unless planning to build more of the scene around this area.
  • StJoris
    Some good words on the technicalities and how to make it work already being said. I'd just like to chime in with some architectural crits that haven't been said.
    If you look at the ref you can see they used some ordering principles when making this building, including axises and grids. It immediately strikes me that you just winged all the placements and proportions. The portico is the most obvious, why did you make distance between the middle two columns bigger?
    This also makes it functionally quite strange, if you follow the handrail you are almost bumping into a column, because now they are much closer to the rail.
  • Cryocat
    Update! Been trying to take these crits into consideration, especially concerning the front of the building. As you can see the back is a bit further behind.
    I'd appreciate any further Crits as I continue to work on this project.
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    2048x2048 diffuse:
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  • Cody
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    Cody polycounter lvl 15
    Hey bud. This is looking better. First thing off the bat, the lighting could use some work. Either delete all your lights, and use the default lighting for now, or do a better 3 point lighting setup. I can't find the link to Vig's explanation, but it is one fill light for main directional light, a second light, slightly dimmer about 90-110 degrees away from that one, and another light behind those two, so your shadows aren't pitch black as they are now.

    Secondly, you have some smoothing errors on the base of the bell tower, and the window above the side door. That is easily fixed.

    Texture wise, you rarely want to use that pure a white in the diffuse, because it can easily be over exposed by lighting. This can be remedied by the specular, however, which you should start working on. Some of your tiling parts could use some work as well. Use the offset filter in photoshop to help fix that. crop the individual texture that you are tiling and play with offset [filters-other-offset] you will see what i mean.
    Your texture layout in general is kinda all over the place. Look in the mod-facade threads for some examples of some better layouts. Also having the same wood texture with some photoshop adjustments doesn't look very good. those are for the fence, I assume?

    On the model itself, looking a lot better. I see you modeled the handrails, and fixed the stairs, but on the side stairs, there is that huge ledge that is stairs in the concepts. Also, I see some geometry that has some unnecessary lines about. Instead of circling all the exact examples, I will say this...not everything needs to be attached. Different parts can be floating geometry. Trim on a wall can be separate, as can steps. No need to waste triangles trying to attach them.

    All these are my opinion, and not necessarily true, or correct. It's just what I see. Sorry if this sounded too harsh, just honestly trying to help a brother out. Wow, this was a long reply.

    All in all it is looking a lot better, and I hope you take it farther and make it as good as it can be. Ki for life!
  • GOBEE
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    GOBEE polycounter lvl 10
    Looking a lot better. However, this is what I would do if I were you. There is still a wrong sense of scale in the front. Hopefully what I'm saying will help.

    The hand rails look A LOT better. But unfortunately still look off due to the size of the columns. Compare your screenshots with the actual photo reference. Look at screenshot, look at reference.. back and forth, back and forth. You should be able to tell that the hand rails in your scene are almost as long/tall as your columns. Kinda measure the hand rails in your photo ref by eye, and it looks like the columns should be about 2 1/2 times as long/tall as your hand rails. Also what is throwing it off is the exact amount of stairs you have leading up to the front entrance. Now, I don't know if you're modelling this to be exactly the same but if you are, there should only be 7 steps leading up to the front door. You have modelled 9 steps. Delete the bottom 2, and try moving the other steps you have modelled down, and then try scaling the columns up more. The columns need more thickness to them.

    Keep it up man! It's definitely getting better!
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