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Hello all! 

I suppose now would be a good time to introduce myself and give you a bit of background with my experience in 2D art. Drawing has been a hobby of mine my entire life and something that I am very passionate about. Aside from the few art classes I took throughout my elementary and high school years, I am mostly self taught. 

I've dabbled in digital art the last few years, but recently decided it's time for me to get a bit more serious and REALLY learn how to draw. So here I am--ready for your feedback, constructive criticism, and critique. This thread will serve as a space for me to share my ongoing projects in hopes that through your advice and knowledge, I can improve my skills! Thanks in advance.

~Aelfyn 

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  • aelfyn
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    I recently finished a profile piece inspired by an Elder Scrolls Online character. She has several looks, which you can see below. 

    I was having issues painting the last look, where she is wearing a veil made of harpy talons. The talons look a bit off, almost as if they are popping off the page. I tried repainting and adjusting them, but to no avail. Perhaps my lighting is off? 

    Any critique on the drawing as a whole would be greatly appreciated!

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    birb said:
    Welcome. You're off to a good start here!

    Answering your question:...
    Hi birb!

    Wonderful feedback. I appreciate you taking the time to reply! I'll definitely look into some exercises for lighting as you suggested.
    And yes! You're totally welcome to paint over - thanks again!
  • aelfyn
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    Wow!
    I can't thank you enough for all of the information you've provided and for taking the time to prepare a paint over. Seeing the difference in lighting really made me realize how flat my original drawing is. Looks like I've got my work cut out for me--time to delve down the rabbit hole of lighting. Pretty excited to revisit this piece and play around with the light/shadows. Thanks again. :) 

  • JosephIV
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    Look good, I think there are some distortion between face sides but much better; remember to mirror frequently  the image when you paint. Please, check her ears.
  • carvuliero
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    carvuliero ngon master
    Maybe you could work a bit on facial symmetry also some of her neck is missing on the right side
  • Eric Chadwick
    Love the progress on this OP. I frontpaged the crit rather than the OP, as sometimes it's nice to highlight an excellent crit when we see one. But the OP also deserves recognition for their work on this. Kudos @aelfyn !
  • aelfyn
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    Thanks @birb, @JosephIV and @carvuliero for the great feedback, and thanks @Eric Chadwick for the kind words!

    I've learned a lot on this one thanks to you all. I attempted to use that newfound knowledge and apply it to my latest piece (below). 


  • aelfyn
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    Currently working on a new illustration. Feedback welcome (and needed)!


  • tysiu
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    I like your style, has this kind of sorrowful, feminine look. You have really nice variation of colour in the hair and the skin tone is fabulous <3

    If you want some feedback, the shading on the ear looks flat, and those darker shadows make it only more visible. The folds should have more structure to them, compare it to a normal human ear (but make it pointy). To avoid that flat look, shade it like it's made of cylinders or tubes.

    The eye on the left could use more refinement (at least with the eyebrows and eyelashes) and maybe blur them down a bit, the lines are super sharp compared to the nose. The wings of the nose don't need to cast such a long shadow to the right(unless the light is super dramatic), you can make that much shorter. Especially coz the light comes from the top.
  • aelfyn
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    @tysiu, thanks for the compliment and feedback. :) Here are the adjustments:






  • carvuliero
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    carvuliero ngon master
    I have few suggestions how to fight prospective and proportional issues
    Imagine head as a box this will allow you to easily orient it in space in any angle
    Draw a simple prospective grid to adjust facial feature alignment
    Find where corner between front and side of the head is then find the middle of the side plane and place front of the ear there  -> this will fix short side plane [roughly  a cm from where is it now ]
    I would give her a fuller forehead
  • aelfyn
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    Thanks all for the feedback!

    Here's the latest WIP I've been working on. This is the first time I've drawn a male character, which was challenging for me to say in the least. Of course, all critique and feedback welcome!



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