Student looking for feedback! 3D Model/Texture

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  Uberren polycounter lvl 11

  Apr 2014

  Going down the list:
  Group Asset Shot
  The group shot of assets has a poor cel shading attempt, the models also appear to be very simple shapes with very simple textures. Maybe with a better presentation they would look more appealing, but as of right now it's just a pile of shapes sitting atop a very low resolution, poorly tiled ground texture with what I'm assuming is the default Unity background colour. It needs lighting, a more interesting surrounding, and a fix to the cel-shading. I think what you did was take the original mesh, duplicated it, expanded it out a bit, and then inverted the noormals to get the black outline? I don't know a lot about Unity, but isn't there a toon shader you can use with the program that achieves the desired effect?
  
  Futuristic Mobile Unit
  Materials all read the same. They all appear to be a some sort of lumpy plastic. The glass on the cockpit does not read as glass.
  
  Also, think about the purpose of the vehicle. From looking at it, people should be able to tell what its purpose is. I cannot tell if your glider is a military vehicle, a commercial/luxury vehicle, or even a glider for that matter. Use lots of references of actual water gliders/hydrofoils to see how they are put together in order to serve their purpose.
  
  Sword and Shield
  I would say this is your weakest piece. The texture work on these is extremely lazy. All you did was take a tiling texture and placed it into the appropriate UV islands and then used flat colours and overlayed a lumpy texture over them. Your normal maps look like they were created in Crazybump directly from the diffuse. I would start over completely with the textures.
  
  Glove Asset
  Again, the textures and materials need work. The glove and those yellow plates have the same looking material on them. The plating has a looot of scratches and wear and tear in the diffuse, but the plating itself does not look battered at all in terms of lighting bouncing off of dents and grooves that would be left behind from acquiring all those scratch marks. Everything just looks kind of flat.
  
  Creature Model
  Details in diffuse is inconsistent. The antlers look handpainted and like wood, while the fins, neck and head, and parts of the shell have what looks like an overlayed scale and coral texture.
  Just like with the water glider, think about what a sea creature would look like. You're creating what looks like a plesiosaur with a shell, that's fine. But would a creature that lives in the sea really have antlers? If it did have something akin to antlers, I imagine it would be something more like horns that are swept backwards to still allow for a streamlined shape. Also, since it has what appears to be a shell, the head really shouldn't be sticking straight up like that. Sea dwellers are streamlined creatures. They need to be able to slice through the water.
  
  
  Hope this helped.

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  anikab

  Apr 2014

  Uberren wrote: »

  Going down the list:
  Group Asset Shot
  The group shot of assets has a poor cel shading attempt, the models also appear to be very simple shapes with very simple textures. Maybe with a better presentation they would look more appealing, but as of right now it's just a pile of shapes sitting atop a very low resolution, poorly tiled ground texture with what I'm assuming is the default Unity background colour. It needs lighting, a more interesting surrounding, and a fix to the cel-shading. I think what you did was take the original mesh, duplicated it, expanded it out a bit, and then inverted the noormals to get the black outline? I don't know a lot about Unity, but isn't there a toon shader you can use with the program that achieves the desired effect?
  
  Futuristic Mobile Unit
  Materials all read the same. They all appear to be a some sort of lumpy plastic. The glass on the cockpit does not read as glass.
  
  Also, think about the purpose of the vehicle. From looking at it, people should be able to tell what its purpose is. I cannot tell if your glider is a military vehicle, a commercial/luxury vehicle, or even a glider for that matter. Use lots of references of actual water gliders/hydrofoils to see how they are put together in order to serve their purpose.
  
  Sword and Shield
  I would say this is your weakest piece. The texture work on these is extremely lazy. All you did was take a tiling texture and placed it into the appropriate UV islands and then used flat colours and overlayed a lumpy texture over them. Your normal maps look like they were created in Crazybump directly from the diffuse. I would start over completely with the textures.
  
  Glove Asset
  Again, the textures and materials need work. The glove and those yellow plates have the same looking material on them. The plating has a looot of scratches and wear and tear in the diffuse, but the plating itself does not look battered at all in terms of lighting bouncing off of dents and grooves that would be left behind from acquiring all those scratch marks. Everything just looks kind of flat.
  
  Creature Model
  Details in diffuse is inconsistent. The antlers look handpainted and like wood, while the fins, neck and head, and parts of the shell have what looks like an overlayed scale and coral texture.
  Just like with the water glider, think about what a sea creature would look like. You're creating what looks like a plesiosaur with a shell, that's fine. But would a creature that lives in the sea really have antlers? If it did have something akin to antlers, I imagine it would be something more like horns that are swept backwards to still allow for a streamlined shape. Also, since it has what appears to be a shell, the head really shouldn't be sticking straight up like that. Sea dwellers are streamlined creatures. They need to be able to slice through the water.
  
  
  Hope this helped.

  
  Thank you very much for your detailed critique. I will definitely take everything into consideration!

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