[Art] a hallway

turb0n3rz

this is a hallway i decided to make

inception gave me the idea but a long dark bare hallway is what i had in mind

critiques are appreciated
do not be afraid to hurt my feelings cause u wont
your responses help the overall growth of my becoming of a 3-d artist

thanks


all 3-d render(s) were created, modeled and rendered by Beven "turb0n3rz" wade
with the use of the following software:

blender 2.62

gimp

sketchbook pro

originally posted at the following url
"http://fc04.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2012/094/5/1/a_hallway______duhhhhhh_____by_turb0n3rz-d4v22uc.png"

Lucas Annunziata

I mean, you set out to creat a bare hallway and you did. I think the proportion of the door at the end of the hallway is a little wide, and same with the hallway itself. Your hallway looks like a perfect square. Maybe squeeze it in a bit.

I know you're going for "bare" but you could add the doorframes at least? and a little trim that goes along the base of the walls? Maybe experiment with a couple different mood lightings here.

turb0n3rz

you know, i am missing door frames

i really dont plan to touch this image for a while

i will add some door frames thou

Orchidface

Door knobs look good, lol. Looks like CG, but how could it not being that plain. Agree it needs door frames obviously, lol. Like what darbeenbo said though... it is what it is, and its not going to impress any 3d artists lol.

turb0n3rz

lolz its not to impress its just there to help me grow to get better
when i wanna impress you will know it

thanks thou

nick2730

turb0n3rz wrote: »

lolz its not to impress its just there to help me grow to get better
when i wanna impress you will know it

thanks thou

a little arrogant dont you think? He was just offering an opinion

Joshua Stubbles

Yep, handles look good.

Needs door trim, floor/ceiling trim/molding, lights (wall sconces perhaps?), electrical outlets, tables/stands, flowers/plants, picture frames or mirrors. The hallway does look strange being a perfect square. Doors look a little too wide. Maybe a window at the end of the hall instead of another room?. Could use a separation of materials, even for the render (ie; less spec for the carpet). Right now everything is just the same. Even for a learning experiment, those kinds of art basics will help people focus on the scene and not the obvious issues.

David-J

are you going to texture this? if you aren't and you are focused only on the modeling, is it aimed for film or games? Just a couple of questions so we can give better critiques.

Savannakhet

Stick a skirting board in.

turb0n3rz

nick2730 wrote: »

a little arrogant dont you think? He was just offering an opinion

not arrogant

and if you noticed

i thanked him for his opinion

Olli.

looks weird how the floor is the same material as the walls/roof

Orchidface

Orchidface wrote: »

Door knobs look good, lol. Looks like CG, but how could it not being that plain. Agree it needs door frames obviously, lol. Like what darbeenbo said though... it is what it is, and its not going to impress any 3d artists lol.

I'm sorry. I meant that more mildly than it sounded. I think the way I worded that was pretty douchy. I didn't mean to sound like a dick.