RIFT collosus

OtrickP

Hello!
Nothing but personal/portfolio projects now. I Graduated from a 2 year 3D multimedia program and I'm hungry to start improving and building a portfolio

First summer dealio and first contest..
My contest entry for the RIFT create a colossus contest. I'm not grate with organic models/texturing. I'd apretiate any and all feedback!












First submission




Second submission (this is where the deadline was cut <//3)
Also a first for me in Marmoset.




After Submitting again and working on it secretly...I decided it was still pretty rough.. so I'm pushing on past the contest. Seeking wise poly counting words to help become a better artist!

Me thinks the pose is weak and balance is off, lighting and textures could use a few revisions too so here we go!

Changed pose and lighting

Hazardous

Our lead animator is going to love this. Truely love it.

Looking forward to seeing how it turns out man

OtrickP

Rofl, thanks Hazardous!
...adding more tentacles immediately :poly142:

SarahFaber

Love the design. What kind of color scheme is going on this beast? Deadline's coming up fast, so best of luck.

I know my fellow Humber postgrads are entering concept pieces (Danik and Tyleen). I've been considering doing one even just for fun since looking at all those entries put me in the mood to make a monster!

OtrickP

Thanks Sarah, sorry late respond! I guess you can see the scheme now

tristamus

What a cute creature!

OtrickP

Thanks! Cuddly was the vibe that i was going for :P

P442

Does this creature move freely or is it stuck in the ground? I suggest lightening the color of the tentacles to a yellowish green, and also tapering them to be large at the body of the monster. I like the color scheme, but feel the colors are too saturated. Also, I'm not noticing any spec or normal maps.
If you plan on putting into UDK, playing with transmission mask might be cool.

OtrickP

P442 -I agree, it looks very bottom heavy. The colors are quite intense all around, its taking away from the more significant details. The spec and Normals are both quite intense and i find they are not working in harmony- Thanks for your feedback. Uppin' textures soon!

konstruct

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OtrickP

Konstruct- Your a great artist! I would love some feedback.

OtrickP

Here's a late but needed update! I started a Freelance project over the summer but my time is up for that now. I'm updating all my old work to give them the "portfolio worthy polish". I also have a new website going live in about a week. Here's a test render I'm getting ready for a Mini environment, Im placing this Gnarlytree in. Enjoy!

konstruct

Right know the biggest thing that jumps out to me is the readability of the final presentation.

Depth of field IS cool, and it certainly aids in presentation. he issue with yours, is it has a harsh alpha. The blur needs to soften the edges of the form as well, not just the interior information.

Id also say that your texture is a bit noisy. I get that this is supposed to be an exotic plant creature, but everything is soo saturated that it creates a conflict of focus. Where do you want the viewer to be drawn into?

Also I`m not too sure if its the texture, or the UV`s but something about various parts of this model seem a bit too blurry. A huge part of keeping a clean look is consistently scaled UV shells- OR if your feeling fancy- taking that concept and using UV scaling to create focal points.

OtrickP

Thanks Konstruct, i appreciate it!
Im glad you hit on presentation, ill look into softening the outer edges. The focal point issue has been heck with this piece because of all the things going on, ill try to desatch and create an easy flow for the image.
Thanks again! keep em coming