David Milligan Sketchbook
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Hi Polycounters, I've decided it is time i started my thread in the hope that i can get feedback on my work so that i can improve upon it.
I am currently a 2nd year Games Art student at Hertfordhsire University in England. It's a great course with some really talented students and lecturers.
Please, please, please, pick my work apart, i can take it and want as much feedback as possible, it's the only way i will get better.
Well here is my first piece that i am working on, his name is Harry Vickard and he is the main character for a game cinematic i and a few of my friends are working on as part of a university project.
Let me know what you think, the jacket has barely been touched so ignore it if possible.
Glad to be here guys, some really inspiring work going on here!
I am currently a 2nd year Games Art student at Hertfordhsire University in England. It's a great course with some really talented students and lecturers.
Please, please, please, pick my work apart, i can take it and want as much feedback as possible, it's the only way i will get better.
Well here is my first piece that i am working on, his name is Harry Vickard and he is the main character for a game cinematic i and a few of my friends are working on as part of a university project.
Let me know what you think, the jacket has barely been touched so ignore it if possible.
Glad to be here guys, some really inspiring work going on here!
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I'll hopefully be showing the low poly baked version within the next few days so please come back to check it out.
http://www.davidmilligan.net/
This could help out - http://androidarts.com/art_tut.htm
I agree about changing up the hairline, instead of that flat edge a few strands of hair either through alpha or painted onto his brow as well as some shadowing along the hairline would go a long way to 'grounding' the hair.
The design pattern on his waist skirt thing, doesn't seem like it goes with the cloth. Like the pattern is high enough up so the fraying edges don't interact with it. Then also where the cloth is bunched up and goes under his belt buckle - that has no impact on the design either.
Your sculpted details on the clothing is all the same basic 'volume'. I'm assuming the upper boots are wrapped leather, the pants are cloth and the waist thing is another cloth piece? But the folds across all three have the same basic depth / formation to them even though the material is different or being acted upon very differently - the skirt thing being pulled by the belt compared to the pants being crumpled up by the boots.
All in all, looks awesome!
Remember when i said i have been quite a busy bee, well it is because i have been working on this new environment piece...
It is based on this great piece of concept art by our very own Aaron Foster aka razorb.
Anyway, point is, i would llloooovvvvvveeee and nneeeeeedddd some feedback on this piece. Like whats working or whats not working? What should i add or take away? PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE!
Is there a reason for such damage onto the metal plates all over the place (especialy when those plates are not near human activity zones)
It looks repetitive and get boring.
The red light in the back is fuggly, really kills the mood.
Trying spacing the wires on top like the concept shows and maybe desaturate them a bit because they attract too much attention.
Work on the metal shader more. Choose your wisely your "dirty" zones.
Maybe add some dust particules in the volume of the lights. It looks cool on the concept.
You could try making them a dark grey instead of pure black - remember that a texture is the colour of a material when fully lit.
Also, a rreeeeaaallllyyyy exciting/unique asset i made. Would love to know what you guys think of both pieces.
I did the same test, so I know where you got the job and that it wasn't easy getting there!
Major kudos!