Benelli Autoshotgun ho yeahhh

Orb

Hello, been playing more left4dead than working on my portfolio at the moment so I decided to merge my interests by making an autoshotgun! It's gone some ways to improving my newbie "Hard modelling" skills, heres what I've come up with! C&C welcome
2048x2048 ~7000 triangles


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High poly (ill make a screen of the wire soon)


low poly


hope you'll like it!

Shogun3d

Nice job man this came out really nicely. Great attention to detail with the shotgun shells, i'm glad you kept it accurate and gave it plenty of texture work.

HAL

I suggest that you might want to add a bit dirt/smudges/scratches into the plastic, and the receiver to give it a bit more character.

And I would reduce the intensity of the barrel's metal's structure.

In addition, that triangle "crown" or whatever in the front below the barrel, is that an error or is that there on purpose?

Orb

thx for the comments!

heh the famous triangle x), well maybe its more smoothy in the real one, but i must say that the real shape is kind of weird.

http://us4.pixagogo.com/S58UTKI1w3i7PL6PLP4mazpCs0Wc1yk-dWyKUC!QK4pgNNE-VEV0g7t8x4-qlyTUxIVoSyp4opW2Uv1T4Q9jmZJqIDfq61n7sH/DSC_0150.jpg

btw i'll add some dirty to the plastic you right.

HAL

Ahhhh sry you didnt get what I meant ^^ Look below the front sight, there is that triangle shape.

Rumkugel

Scratches appear a bit random to me, rest i pretty nice tho.

crazyfingers

No crits here, could definitely see this in game.

renderhjs

a little bit overuse of blooming and chromatic aboration (obvious to some eyes) but nice anyways

HolyMonkey

Hey, nice looking shotgun you got there!

In my opinion, the marks on the barrel is way to random and takes too much attention, You've done a good job with the texturing so tweaking that shouldn't be a problem for you

I also took a look at your NM, it seems as you have some shading errors, however they aren't showing on the screens so unless they show when you rotate your model about in marmorset then I guess it's nothing to worry about

Firebert

a friend of mine has a benelli with a black finish. first and foremost, these things are built to last. it would take a lot of punishment and still look pretty damn clean. i don't think anyone would go dragging the nose of the barrel around on the ground, which is about the only way you could achieve that much weathering in that area. you would see the weathering like that flaring from the inside of the barrel to the flat brim from the shells spiraling out, but not on the exterior like you have it now. you would see more residue in that area instead. i would keep scratching and any weathering on the barrel to a minimum.

obviously i'm really focused on that area of the gun, but that's because the rest of it looks really good, and this part just hurts the overall gun itself. right now, it looks like watered down paint drops everywhere.

fix that noise, and you got a really sweet addition to the portfolio man.
and i can't really totally tell, but did you pull an AO bake? if you did, i would either make it a little stronger, or add it into your spec some to help make some areas pop a little better.

EarthQuake

diffuse looks a little bright?

Tumerboy

wtf did you do to that barrel? To much damage, or at least too random. It almost looks like it's galvanized (which it shouldn't be. Keep the wear minimal, and in logical places (muzzle, top, etc.), and in logical patterns (more rubbing damage, less grinding damage. It looks like someone took a dremel to the front of that thing.)

Orb

thanks for the critics, that helps me a lot! i should had showed the work in progress earlier if i'd known. So @firebert/Tumerboy, yeah agree with the barrel, i wanted to try so kind of diferent metal (galvanized), but looks like it doesnt work very well, ill change it for a clean darker metal.

i don't think anyone would go dragging the nose of the barrel around on the ground

yeah true ^^, i'll erase that stupid mistake.

ps: there is no oc map, i merge it with the diffuse.

Orb

little update,

i tryed to fix all the problems you guys said, like the barrel metal shader, the stupid nonsense scratches ^^, the triangle bug (i have an other one to fix in the back), and the receiver specular!

and this time i didnt forget to save my post ^^"
thx a lot for the help, C&C are still welcome, and very helpfull of course.

Pedro Amorim

hey orb. i see on your webpage that you speak portuguese. you have portuguese roots?

Krypteia

I second bitmap's question.

Do you have Brasilian or Portuguese roots Bitmap? I was born in Brasil myself.

/end hijack thread

BradMyers82

Nice update.
The scratches still look a little weird to me, but the more subtle approach is definitely better imo.
Either way, this is a really cool shotgun you have here.

Firebert

looks much, much better... i second EQ... the diffuse should be darker all around. the barrel should definitely be darker.

Orb

thx!

bitmap/Krypteia: yes portuguese roots lol


about the colors, i have many references of this autoshot gun, and it depends, i saw many variations of the barrel color, i think i'm happy with a brighter barrel like this one. Btw i'll make the diffuse a bit darker, for the final shots!

Firebert

i hear ya on the barrel. makes sense based on your ref.
i would say your receiver and other areas need to be darkened up a bit.
looks like you are basing your color off of the last image you showed, which looks really washed out from the lighting. keep that in mind to. i would say go with a color closer to this for the other parts that need to be darker.

Orb

i'm back, with something a lot more darker like the classic ref, hope you like it

beartraps

looks great man, i love the scotch tape on the buttstock.

tight work!

Firebert

solid work man... looks hawt

imb3nt

Looks F'n awesome!


EXCELLENT WORK!