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Turret WIP

im currently working on this piece still WIP.. i am UV/texturing it atm... will update soon with textures ... feel free to critique .. thanks in advance ..
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  • Zotter
    Looks pretty cool, though it would be nice to see a larger render.

    Only thing I can think at the moment is that the pipe in the upper part of the hydraulics that is holding up the gun look a little thin and too weak to support the size of the gun.
  • AtlusZMH
    Looks good so far.. i think you can push the idea a bit further and flesh it out a little bit.. right now it looks like a simple gun pokin out of the ceiling.. maybe add a camera?

    Is it a laser gun, or a gun type turret? maybe add a cool looking clip and action mechanism too :D

    just some thoughts!
  • Hatred
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    Hatred polycounter lvl 18
    have you think about how it look from the bottom? you know i see itll be mounted on the celling so the bottom angle will be the one most important (if you plan mounting it other way its cool, i just want to point it out, in our company someone done the same mistake, it ended on redesigning the whole mesh right after we seen it ingame finished :) )
  • duxun
    thanks for the responses...


    @Zotter : yes it appears that the gun is heavier for that part of the hydraulics to hold it up.. but if you think about it this is a laser turret and the gun part is made out of plastic .. however i made the gun oversize for design reasons . it gives this object a stylized feel that i am happy with.. but if you were my art director... id change it no questions asked!!!..

    @AtlusZMH : yes it is a laser turret... and your right it does look plain atm ill revize and add more elements to my design..

    @Hatred : good point .. characters walk below this object ... as an artist i want the player to take notice of the beautifull environment he is in and that includes the props that go with it... ill design a bottom part..
  • duxun
    small update on that turret.

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    critiques are more than welcome...
  • Tumerboy
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    Tumerboy polycounter lvl 17
    I dig the design. feels artillery-y

    my only beef is the barrel (and it's pretty minor) but the tip looks rather phallic, and it's also ribbed for her pleasure.

    I would elongate the flash hider, cut some holes in it, lose the ribbing in the middle, and taper the whole barrel down toward the tip slightly.
  • crazyfingers
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    crazyfingers polycounter lvl 10
    I'd put the camera off to the side. It looks like the barrel of the turret would obsctruct the view currently. I also think a touch of asymmetry does any art asset good, especially stuff with wires and stuff.
  • duxun
    ok i see what you guys are saying i will update...
  • duxun
    thanks for pointing that out Tumerboy... i made some changes... hope its doesnt read like that anymore..

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  • Tumerboy
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    Tumerboy polycounter lvl 17
    You've got too much shit going on on the barrel. What are the indents down the side? The flash hider still seems too mushy and butt-pluggy.

    Take a look around at some Anti Aircraft guns, they always look rather turrety to me (just scaled up). Look at the barrels & flash hiders on them.

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    800px-German_105_mm_Flak_38_anti-aircraft_gun.jpg
    The Mk. 19 is also a good ref.
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  • duxun
    ok one thing to note tumerboy is this is a laser turret not a gun turret. but ill ake more changes NP..
  • Tumerboy
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    Tumerboy polycounter lvl 17
    LOL sorry, must have missed that somewhere.
  • duxun
    NP. i need all the help i can get.
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