Character WIP: Sundae Girl

Jonasz

Hello all, this is my first WIP thread here. I'll try make first character model.
Modeling in XSI. I am hoping to finish this character.
Critique is very wanted. Thanks all!

Concept:

00Zero

very nice. i like your work. but your website bothers me. it takes almost 10 seconds to load an image.

Sandro

Very cool so far. Only thing that bothers me is her head on concept, which is way too tightly packed inside helmet. Some indication of neck would be nice too.

n88tr

Awesome, I love the style.

How do you make the model visor transparent like that?

Belias

drag the head away from the glass , or it is only an IOR ?

butt_sahib

Yeah i personally dig it aswell nice looking concept aswell.

Alec3d

I'm a little confused at why you started modeling hair strands when there was no head or am I mistaken?

P442

i would try adding a groove to the helmet where the lights are, or maybe get rid of the lights on top of the helmet altogether. They make the helmet look a little like a gecko with an open mouth

Pencilninja

Alec3d wrote: »

I'm a little confused at why you started modeling hair strands when there was no head or am I mistaken?

I would assume he has the basic head modeled but not at a point where he wanted to show it.

Jonasz

::00Zero:: Sorry Serozh maybe in future I change faster server.
I knew your work earlier. Amazing! Thank for Reply.

::Sandro:: I'll try correct helmet. Thank

::n88tr:: ::Belias:: Thank... You mean transparent on visor in concept ? First I rendered body, some element "Armors mainly". After I drawing in photoshop. I advice videotutorial http://www.thegnomonworkshop.com/store/product/534/

::butt_sahib:: thank man

::Alec3d:: I hidden base mesh, has not to observe that. Dont worry, when i finish i show face.

::P442:: After I will make other version with lamps. Open mouth that is good idea.

::Pencilninja:: You right thank

Jonasz

Updeit...

P442

looks good so far. It looks like there is a hole in her hand. Maybe just open faces or unwelded vertices?
Also, the shoulder pads could be more interesting. Something seems off about them to me. Maybe, the lower shoulder pad should be bigger and come down more to cover more of her arm.
What is the device on her arm?

Jonasz

::P442:: Thank you... Woman is specialist for tasks chemical - biologically. Device something similar to pipboy. You know, inspiration fallout 3.

Ok. I correct face. Some anatomical errors ?

P442

Hope this helps

Jonasz

Hello, thank very much P442. I correct body, face.
I think isn't no good that has got simply pants.
I dont like new version pants. I would make new all.



Old version:


New:

P442

looks really good so far

Avanthera

the new head sculpt is way better,
I liked the stylized jeans, but these new boots and bodysuit fits in well with the rest.
keep it up

woogity

very nice work sir look forward to your progress!


-Woog

Jonasz

Hello everybody.
Very thank P442, shrew81, woogity.

Okej, let's go. I put new updeit.
Correct hand:



Laser Gun:


Normal colors:




(I know I must correct arms for animations)

oalexis

Amazing looking model!

Kevin Johnstone

I love the delicate anf flimsy clothing, it has a nice elegant scifi woman feel and it is nice to see such a design that doesn't rely on big heels, big boobs, lots of flesh. I also like the latest head, she has a fantastical feeling to her , again a refreshing design to see, a nice other worldly quality runs through everything.

ralusek

this is excellent work man. your modeling is great. i have a few problems with the design itself, and i'm not quite sure about her posture.

she seems to have like a "lava lamp" shape instead of an hourglass. i'm not saying model her naked, but i would have done it a little less bulked.

i would maybe make her posture a little straighter, she seems to be dropping her shoulders back with her gut sticking forward. also, her feet should be angled out a bit, as they are now it gives her an awkward stance.

but other than that, awesome modeling!

PhilB

This is looking amazing, I like it:)

I like this face better, She looks more intelligent.
But that's just my opinion, you know what you're doing more than most of the people here critiquing it.

Jonasz wrote: »

sampson

i would remove the strange shoulderpads and redesign the helmet/neck armour. She would look pretty badass with a more "light" armour/quicker/curvier

2cool4school

Sweeeeet gun! Looking good. Can't wait to see it finished.

JohnnyRaptor

looking good dude, but looks like her neck is way too long with all that armour from shoulder to chin,

Jonasz

::oalexis:: thank dude

::Kevin Johnstone:: Hey, thank you very much... I happy you like it. You are awesome modeler.

::ralusek:: Thank, for good critics but i dont want make her straighter. I want show little dynamics posture and see good rotation 360.

::PhilB:: Thank... but most of the people want beauty face.

::sampson:: thank, i'll correct. Next time i show u.

::2cool4school:: Me too i cant wait to finish. hehe

::JohnnyRaptor:: You right Johnny. Neck is too long. I see now.
Thank

Update gun and short test animation:
If cancel cable of capacitor ?? What do you think.

Test gun on Vimeo

Willburforce

This is all amazing. The video is cool... All good!

Is the trigger bit too small for fingers compared to the handle?

Jonasz

Hi all, thank for watching
I redesign helmet, i hope that for good. Sorry for weak quality music on vimeo.

Redesign helmet on Vimeo

woogity

first off great stuff new helmet rocks would like to see an image of it sans wires as well, tho your edgeflow is quite nice.
second the gun is pretty damn sweet, gotta love moving bits, but i think the handle may be a bit too wide for her hand just judging baised off the size of the trigger, also i dont feel like her finger could fit in the trigger guard to actually use the gun, the guard is much more open in the concept i think it would be good to give that a try, also try placing it in her hand to check functionality.

still this is awesome i do dig the gun design alot. the simple elegance of that knife is great to see along with all this complexity as well. she might want a sheath for it tho.


i think some of the facial proportions could use a little help too, the nose is a little small and the jaw is super narrow and the upper head is a bit wide, usually 5 eyes wide across where the eyes are. if she is wearing that sweet helmet than it might not be worth redoing it.


great stuff so far tho. new helmet is a good choice!

-Woog

Jonasz

Very thank woogity.

Hi, i show update












I dont know how repair this:



Cheers:)

uneditablepoly

Some great modeling happening here. Like someone else said about the gun, is the trigger big enough compared to the handle?

teaandcigarettes

Really nifty stuff Not sure if you’ve read it, but design reminds me of Blame and the suits that fishermen wore in Toha Heavy Industries.

roosterMAP

un-freaking-believable!!! you, sir, are a master.

brandoom

Looks awesome. Really, awesome.

I'm not totally sure about those errors you don't know how to fix but it looks like a smoothing group issue to me.

Jonasz

::uneditablepoly:: thank. I know is already corrected

::teaandcigarettes:: Thank. hmm... Toha Heavy Industries. The first time I hear.
Do you have got picture with fishermen.?

::roosterMAP:: haha, no I'm not master, no yet. Thanks for the good words dude.

::brandoom:: thank

I throw the first attempt with the colors, in a few places there is no ready-made textures, mechanical scratches (on pipboy, grenades, etc..), but it is yet to catch up.

Jonasz

verybad

Great model. MORE!

achillesian

face seems large, or wide maybe?

DrillerKiller

Nice work! i like your beige hp renders. Her head seems a bit large to me to me. great model though!