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Hi everbody,

I'm kinda stuck on this piece. I have to give it more life, the hands/feet are need more posing and something went (terrible) wrong with face. Hope you guys can help me out.

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p.s I should post more often, have been watching these boards for (6) years now :S

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  • woogity
    Hey dude,
    agreed you should post more often. Ok so at a glance ok, the hand on the ground needs more posing its very unbelievable in that pose. also, i think whats up witht he face is that the lower jawline appears to be asymmetrical. also with the pose im not sure but it seems the face is a bit low on the head, or a bit small for it, i believe the face also has a curve to it which could be throwing everything off, it appears the nose is slightly crooked with the mouth positioned normally underneath it, this could make the whole face look bent. Gl with the fixes!

    -Woog
  • Zephir62
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    Zephir62 polycounter lvl 12
    eyes and brows too far apart. eyebrows too short. mouth too small. nostrils too big and round. forehead is too big, brow-ridge non-existant. is she... pregnant? Overall, looks mentally retarded.




    If it makes you feel better, I jerked off to your picture. If you were aiming for porn, you've completely hit the mark.
  • CookieKingHoi
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    CookieKingHoi polycounter lvl 10
    Zephir62 wrote: »
    If it makes you feel better, I jerked off to your picture. If you were aiming for porn, you've completely hit the mark.

    Omg :thumbdown:
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  • ElysiumGX
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    ElysiumGX polycounter lvl 18
    paper bag maybe
  • etsuja
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    etsuja polycounter lvl 17
    Her body isn't bad but something really is wrong with her face as you have noticed... I think it's the bags under her eyes and the eyes are too far apart, for some reason I think of the bitter beer face when looking at her.
  • swampbug
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    swampbug polycounter lvl 18
    There is nothing wrong with the face, some people like that sort of look. In fact I would encourage you to push the age thing. Everyone does attractive ideal females. Go in the other direction... It was the first thing I noticed and it stood out. Your call though.
  • TWilson
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    TWilson polycounter lvl 18
    Hey man. Good work so far. There are some things that need work as you know. The most important at this point is the face.

    Check out http://www.androidblues.com/ for some 3d examples. There's some threads around regarding the topology of a face that are important when it comes to building a face. Also look into the golden ratio for beauty. Cleopatra's mathematical beauty. I couldn't find too much in my thirty second search but here's a shmidget: http://www.intmath.com/Numbers/mathOfBeauty.php

    Part of the problem is she's already posed. You should look for feedback when she's in the T-Pose. Women are the hardest thing to model above any other character to boot. The subtleties to a beautiful female are wild.
  • charger
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    charger polycounter lvl 18
    Woogity: tanx for the advice, I will see into it.

    Zephir62: hope you aimed for the tits.

    ElysiumGX: not a bad idea (right now)

    etsuja: tanx I will work on it

    Swampbug: I agree with you on some level, I dont want a typical blond beauty. But uhm the topology on this one sucks right now.

    TWilson: Tanx for the websites, very helpfull.
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