Art Test Submission Crits/Praise Wanted :)
polycounter lvl 18
Sup Guys, here is an art test Ive been working on in my spare time, it's due on monday. The limitations were 1500 tri's, and 256x256 Texture, they gave me concept art to work from which I won't post. But I would like to hear your thoughts. Do I get the Job?
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Sorry, looks good. The white of his shirt is a little too white, the folds get washed out. I like his hair colour. When black people bleach thier hair it tend to be a more orangely. You've gone for a lighter tone.
He looks like he is some kind of hired thug, but there is a uniform quality to his clothes.
He could be brown too but his face looks black to me (white guy).
Yeah I imagine he's some sort of thug. The armstrap is very nazi-ish.
Sett: Thanks.Yes he's supposed to be black.
*edit - i figured it out... a work around the mirrored texture
the texturing looks good, especially on the face, but i have to agree that its way too red. that comined with the unnaturally colored hair makes him look a little cartoonish. when it first loaded, i thought it was some red-skinned demon-type person, out of Buffy or something. that would probably be fixed by simply changing the color of his exceptionally tight sweater-vest, even if that does go against the concept art. i think they'll understand it wasn't a lack of ability that made it green instead of red.
Sectaurs: Hehehe, Tricky! I modeled the badge and just lined it up right and painted the extension of the suspender over the badge! heheh.
Bradfordart: Thanks man. I dont have the flats uploaded yet, Ill do it tomorrow.
Ya gota clean,simple mesh there which is always a very good start,that could,if needed to be easyily edited and potentially used as base model for others,good job.
Oviously many proportional issues interms of "real-life" but I presume thats intentional due to the concept.
As for the texture I think the issue is a lack of confidence,or at least thats my initial impression and I feel your potential employers may also see it in taht sense,which is not a good thing.
I say that becuase I have the same problems with my textures at the best of times
The pants in particular look very washed out and I think you need to push details,shadow and lighting that bit further...esepcially round areas like the pockets and the belt hoops also make sure you make every pixel work for its place,you have to becuase you texture space is so small,use the 1pixel brush and maybe even pencil to bring details out.
I have found recently the best way over the "washed out" look isto over emphise things and "let loose" simply becuase its easyier to knock back things using levels,contrast,earaser etc rather than build them up and up over and over aain with paint overs as it becuase damn boring.
Apart from that Good job so far.
John
No, I think not, as your work stands.
I like your model and the work you have put in when creating the face and arms texture. The rest, as Bronco said, PUSH IT! The white cloth needs some sort of border at its' egdges and some wrinkles. The pants needs more shadows and highlights and a edge where it meets the shirt. Look at your Vulcan Raven model. The zipper (if that's what it is) on the boots looks really weird. And where's the ziplock? If it's supposed to be strings, I just can't see it.
Just spend a couple of more hours on the texture and you'll have a model that you really can be proud of.
In the front view the elbows are a little thin.
The suspenders are thinner at the bootm than at the top - you might want to revisit your texture or your UV maps.
Te texture where the shirt goes intot he trousers - it just stops. paint in a few wrinkles and make it lok like overlapping cloth.
the texture is a bit on the clean side, and I'm wondering if they REALLY wanted to see that. you know desaturating the skin a bit in a few places would help, and just minor tweaks to make it look more realistic and what not.
anyways good luck and let us know if you get the job
Cubik: Hahah, Cmon man gimmie the job! I got kids to feed! I see you too have a problem with the pants, and I agree there seems to be something I can do to push it, but I dont want to convey the wrinkled army fatigue look, I want it to look like nicley pressed wook slacks.
Rick Sterling: All valid crits, but again the pants issue. when wearing slacks they dont really give much shape to the legs, escpecailly when pressed. they just sort of hang from the hips. I thought it might be pushing it to give the legs shape from the front. Maybe I should take away the front shape to further emphasize they are slacks? It might be confusing?
Irritant: yes the shirt should have seams at the ends of the sleeves. I imagine the shirt to be like that body armor clothing that athletes wear, like a cotton spandex blend. so it is tight but bunches around the armpits.
Mr_Rockstar: Yes my elbows are pinched like that! No really, good call, but you know I want to emphisize the forarm from the bicep. Yeah, I think I'll keep the texture clean to keep with the cartoony/realism feel.
Well,acturally the wrinkles I wasn't really pointing out because I also have probs texturing wrinkles,my main problem is with areas like the belt hooks and pockets things that definatily SHOULD be well empised those features of the pants just look very blurry right now and really need another going over and adjusting to bring them out.
but as the wrinkles are a sticking point id say check out german World war 2 fatigues,It would proberly go well with the so called "neo-nazi" look he has already, id check out the creases round the knees specifically and the groin areas.
Even if you can't make out many creases at least add larger areas of varying depth in the pants...this will give a less flat look to the overall model.
Good luck
john
Better?
ehr not the best explanation but i hope u get my point
i think the face looks great.
given the texture size this is a really great model. im sure you got it man
other than that, awesome.
Speaking of the UV mapping, its still makes the lower part of the suspenders thinner than the top - unless again it was like that in the concept.
his tshirt still just stops when it reachs the trousers - it gives no illusion of going inside them, thus lacking a little depth. You can fix that as easily as drawing a black line around the bottom on a new layer, blurring it a little, duplicating the layer, blurring again, then setting those layers to overlay or multiply and playing with the opacity. Its a 2 minute job at most.
Alex
Oh yeah, and yes the suspenders are supposed to be over his badge. I guess the wanted some sort of asymmetery, along with the scar across his forhead.
Sage: Yeah whenever I get an art test I re-read the instuctions like 5 times. The criteria of the judging will be poly usage, texture painting ability, and closeness to the concept art. But I know what you mean, and I hate it when they do stuff like that.