Cartoony Animation - Feedback

GraceWolf

Hi Everybody! 

I've been trying to explore new animation styles, i usually do more realistic animations but i wanted to get out of my confort zone. What do you think ? 

All the comments are highly apreciated. 

BTW. Thank you for your feedback on my reel. It helped me so much!! 

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AL1izR4Y0Ik&feature=youtu.be

You can draw over in this link. 

https://syncsketch.com/sketch/159246#193101

AnthonyAnimation

The key with fast motion is that you need to give the audience's eye something to focus on. If everything is moving all over the place at a fast speed it's just a jumble. You have two key poses, sitting and standing, but in between that is a little indecipherable. 

Usually the head is what we tend to focus on, so try to keep that in a similar space when jumping up and have the body move around it. I'm on mobile and unfortunately syncsketch doesn't work, but I can look more closely tomorrow.

Don't worry about a camera move, or do a simple zoom out. Currently it's adding to the noise.

GraceWolf

Ohhh. i get it now, i need to work in the middle so the audience can understand the pose and the action. Thank you Anthony. I'm going to start working on that.

_adamturnbull

Hi Grace, the animation itself looks pretty good but like @AnthonyAnimation said everything feels a bit too fast and messy at the moment. All the elements are competing for stage presence at the moment and its hard to know where to look. Try holding him in the air a little longer and have more space between him and the chair so his poses are more readable (maybe bring his legs higher and further back so he has more of a horizontal curve to his pose rather than vertical). Focus on what you want the audience to read and when, then have that dominating the motion and everything else as a secondary action

This is a great video on staging and might be relevant for what you are trying to achieve

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=u-SXLaQGg50

GraceWolf

This is perfect!!! Thank you so much Adam  

GraceWolf

Thank you Everybody!! 
This is how it looks now. 

AnthonyAnimation

Cool! It looks like the arcs could use some cleaning up. If you want detailed feedback try uploading to syncsketch, that way we can frame by frame.

GraceWolf

Thank you Anthony !!!  Still learning how syncsketch works. i think this would be the link 
https://syncsketch.com/sketch/159246#197508

Thank you!!!

AnthonyAnimation

Left some notes, hopefully it helps! You have a solid base, just a few things to tweak.

GraceWolf

Thank you so much!! This is perfect.