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This is the opening to a short film I'm working. I know that I've being looking at all the shots for far too long. I just came back from taking a break from working on it and I really need help to finish it. This is shot 001 of many. So I welcome all feedback
The character is hiding and has a broken arm, then she looking out for the people she is hiding from.
The character is hiding and has a broken arm, then she looking out for the people she is hiding from.
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The dolly in at the start, I'm not sure what you're going for here, is it to show the broken arm? In which case, I'd go tighter and get rid of some of the negative space on the right.
The arm shake is a bit weird. Why does she shake the arm?
When she looks screen left after the shake, you cut too early. I barely have time to read it. Give it a beat, let her move across screen a little and then cut and when you do cut, keep the cam moving.
Quick question, are you going for a handheld type cam or more of a standard cam?
Other than that, looks cool.