[WIP] Last shot for my reel - dialogue shot! :poly101:

penOr

I'm revisiting this shot I was working on end of last year, which will complete my reel if I can be happy with the final product. Dialogue and good quality character animation is definitely my weakest skill, so going to need all the feedback and critique I can get on this!

So far I'm in the blocking plus stage, and am looking for feedback before I jump deep into spline mode D=

[ame]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZOOLCTzTmqQ[/ame]
(playblast messed up my audio sync so it looks a tiny bit off?)

Denny

The blockout looks good to me. The character's intent is clear and no action seems out of place. The last turn when he says "empty" and looks straight at the camera, I wonder if it would be better to add a hold, for a little bit of suspense, before he finally turns back towards the door. I think it could give the viewer a bit of breathing room to digest the dialogue, before he continues his motion. I'm thinking of this in a context where this could be a shot that connects with another one.

Arturow

that looks so good already , I think it will better to give feedback in the splines stage since it is already working as a blocking plus , maybe my only note would be that when he look at the grocery store again at the end , it ends in the same pose as before , I would change that a little

penOr

Thanks guys!

Been slowly chipping away at it, bit of a rough transition to splines because I had some poor control consistency back when I was blocking this.

- All face animation is still in stepped
- Haven't touched fingers
- Recently changed how he starts walking screen right, he snaps into place too much atm

Here's a test render I've been playing with

https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/s/lna0itlrpvfxp2i/twinkie_testrender.mp4?dl=0

linwail

I really enjoy it so far! I can't wait to see how it turns out

penOr

https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/s/pln4c7w1rw0w9nx/twinkie_scene.mp4?dl=0

Getting close to done I think but I need to get some really good feedback on it first

Arturow

Looks awesome!!! I have some notes but they are just minor , hope they help you.

-I have mixed feelings in the movement he makes in " the last " , more in the "the" seems a little bit linear but is so powerful to the accent haha
- When he first reload the hand makes a pop trying to reload , it is too noticeable
-After "believe it or not" his left leg makes a tiny pop in the knee.
-Before "empty" his left eye move more than his right eye making it awkward.

Awesome animation