[UE4] Tesla's Attic

Avix

Critiques would be awesome! My progress so far with a week left on this space.

Rektum

Love it. Great atmosphere! Some of the dark glass is a little distracting. It's almost like they aren't being affected by the atmosphere like everything else. Also, it might be cool if that bright light from the window hit more objects in the room with some kind of a yellow rim.

Zepic

This is coming along nicely..

Right off the bat though, the glass material needs work, it looks way off.

The belts on the gears look like they have a metal material as well. Might want to take a pass at that.

Overall though, this should turn out to be pretty sweet. Keep it up.

ScottHoneycutt

I think the one thing that hits me right away is the lighting is too evenly spread out ... not dynamic enough. Too much GI maybe? It's nice overall.

Avix

Thanks, yeah the materials for the glass do need some work. I will have another update soon with it fixed.

Going to be changing the light coming the window so it is more welcoming.

Thanks for the feedback. Update coming soon.

richkid

I think I would like to see the window light splash down across the bare floor as a nice lead in to the window

Avix

Changes made based on feedback. Glass is still giving problems. Will be messing with that.

Thanks for the advice guys! More feedback is always welcome!

CloDevious

Wine bottles seem a tad odd like the caustics are not working right, reflections seem to be missing too.

narticus

Great concept and looking cool so far! Glass needs some adjustment, as stated above. Wood grain on ceiling rafters is running the wrong way. Should run the length of the wood. Cloth could use some more texture as well as more fraying around the edges. Maybe even a few holes?

Avix

@narticus The wood grain is going the wrong way. Thanks! Yeah, will definitely be taking your advice on adding more to the cloth.

@CloDevious Yeah the reflections are giving problems. Thought I could make them with dynamics but it seems like I'm going to resort back to a reflection map.

Again, thanks for feedback!

beefaroni

ScottMichaelH wrote: »

I think the one thing that hits me right away is the lighting is too evenly spread out ... not dynamic enough. Too much GI maybe? It's nice overall.

YESSSS. I agree. Would love some darker darks for the mood.

ScottHoneycutt

Yeah its still needs more darks for mood. Without the right level of darks, the lights don't pop. Don't feel like you have to clearly show everything. Right now its all very mid-toned.

http://thumb9.shutterstock.com/display_pic_with_logo/55404/55404,1233259191,2/stock-photo-sun-rays-lighting-the-garbage-in-an-old-attic-24091465.jpg

http://thumb101.shutterstock.com/display_pic_with_logo/372004/372004,1239619136,7/stock-photo-the-forgotten-light-image-of-children-s-games-an-old-attic-under-a-roof-black-and-white-28405438.jpg

http://thumbs.dreamstime.com/z/old-attic-sun-rays-lighting-33474771.jpg

ScottHoneycutt

Hopefully this helps. By desaturating your scene you can tell that its very mid-tone heavy. the eye goes to the window but then doesn't really know where to go next. the glow on the ground you introduced isn't helping nearly enough. I'm not sure why there is such a fogging out going on? The wheels on the near-left are seen more clearly which draws the eyes a little more towards them which isn't good (You don't want the viewer concentrating on the far left edge of the screen).

beefaroni

^ Great advice. Definitely push the scene in that direction.

Avix

@ScottMichaelH Awesome!! Thanks so much for the feedback and your time. Yeah, this will definitely help out. I will be making those changes and post an update.

Avix

Here is an update based on the feedback I got. Thanks for the help and let me know if anything else stands out?

ScottHoneycutt

Way better, good improvement. The beams of light are a bit too much for how bright the window is now. I personally would lose them as they are more a distraction to me than anything else. Other than that, I like it

Avix

@ScottMichaelH kk can change that. thanks again for the help!

beefaroni

ScottMichaelH wrote: »

Way better, good improvement. The beams of light are a bit too much for how bright the window is now. I personally would lose them as they are more a distraction to me than anything else. Other than that, I like it

Hah dude you're just straight on point.

Poseidon8734

ScottMichaelH wrote: »

Way better, good improvement. The beams of light are a bit too much for how bright the window is now. I personally would lose them as they are more a distraction to me than anything else. Other than that, I like it

Really really cool and I love the advice michael! Sweet scene!

AlexCatMasterSupreme

Its really god but lacks a clear focal point. My eye is led to the window area but there is nothing there really.

Felixenfeu

You could just get rid of the light in the window, and use those lightbulbs instead to bring the focus on the machines.

Avix

Update based on more feedback. Think this will be the last update for now. Wanted to add candles and wax but will have to come at another time. Thanks for everyones support!

Digitalair

Avix wrote: »

Update based on more feedback. Think this will be the last update for now. Wanted to add candles and wax but will have to come at another time. Thanks for everyones support!

maybe tone down the lamp's brightness a bit? It contrasts too much with the background IMO. The attic where he worked was more a less a peaceful place, so that high contrast is out of place

acanaday

Wow! Really like the updates. It's looking nice.

I do agree that the lights could be a bit distracting. You can probably get away with toning them down a bit, but keep the luminescence in the room the same. Changing it to night was a smart move. Having a back-lit scene is a bit tricky, although I WAS a little bummed you had to bail on the day-time-shining-through-the-window idea.

The cool part about that idea that you didn't capitalize on (which is the BEST reason to use back lighting) is all the free justification you get for gratuitous rim lighting. Which would look super rocking in this scene. Not sure how you could still incorporate that, or maybe just make it into an alternate version if you had time... Come to think of it you dont have much color contrast in this scene. What I would probably try and do, is tone down the incandescent lights to be more of a nice warm glow, then use the back window to create some nice cool moon-light rim. Then you'd be getting a nice cool / warm contrast in your scene. You'd probably have to move the incandescent lights to compensate for this though. So it has a better composition (without the warm lights mixing in with the cool too much).