Aliz
This is a character I am working on for my portfolio.
I was inspired by the universe of the Albert Robida. In his book ''The Twentieth Century'', he describes electric centrals used to control the weather. They can limit the winters, eliminate storms or even bring rain to desertic lands.
So, I imagined a character that would work for those centrals. She would travel in a flying ship, collect meteorological information and transmit them to the central.
I would like to have criticism on the modeling before I move on to retopology and textures.
Thank you!
I was inspired by the universe of the Albert Robida. In his book ''The Twentieth Century'', he describes electric centrals used to control the weather. They can limit the winters, eliminate storms or even bring rain to desertic lands.
So, I imagined a character that would work for those centrals. She would travel in a flying ship, collect meteorological information and transmit them to the central.
I would like to have criticism on the modeling before I move on to retopology and textures.
Thank you!
Replies
- why does she have a naked shoulder ? Doesn't seem useful, especially with the... metal things on it. If it's just to put some asymetry, well you don't need to put asymetry just for the sake of it because people like that. A symetrized leather pilot vest would be less awkward, you can still have asymetric details ( you already have them ).
- what is that metallic "skirt" ? Doesn't seem comfortable to pilot a ship, especially if she has to sit down.
- the heels of the boots look a bit weird.
Well that's it ^^. Keep it up.
Looking forward to seeing more of this!
For the asymetric vest, I designed it that way to make it more visually interesting and create a more original fashion for her.
For the metallic skirt, I imagined it so it can be removed easily (there are clips in the back) so she uses it only to take measurements (there are meteorological instruments on it) and she can remove it after.
Can you explain a bit more in what way you think there is a problem with the heels? I'm looking at my model and I believe there is a problem in the back view. They are not properly aligned with the rest of the boot. Is that what you meant? I had a hard time with the overall shape of the foot, so you are probably right that there is still a problem in that area!
Keranouille: Thank you!
BagelHero: Thanks! I didnt want to overload my model with details, so that is why I kept the pants and boots simpler. I am a bit too far in the process to change the design, so I'll keep her that way, but I'll keep your critique in mind when I will be doing the concept of another character!
Well I guess, here is how your boot could look. Compare it to your model and you'll see what I mean :
It's not really important, but sometimes if the feet look weird the whole character look weird when he/she walks. If you don't want to waste some time changing this it's ok, just think about it for your next character ^^.
Here's a little update:
I changed a bit the proportions (arms are slightly longer and legs a bit shorter). Is it better?
Also I did a little correction on the nose:
I started working on the low poly model. I would like to know how I can make the topology better for animation and how I can optimize it (now it's 27 700 triangles).
I've changed a bit the topology of the jacket and pants so the normal map looks better on them. I also added an other loop on the left shoulder so it deforms better (hopefuly...).
The leather is starting to read as leather, so that's good, but I don't know what material the green material is. It doesn't really "feel" like anything. In fact, not even sold on the green being there at all. If she had green eyes, maybe, but as it stands I'd have a look at changing the green tone to something a bit lighter and warmer. Like... an olive green or something.
It's shaping up, though! Looking forward to the final result.
The slight color change on the shirt makes it feel a lot more convincing, and along with the hair it's come together very well. Seriously looking forward to seeing a final render instead of viewport shots!
I agree with BagelHero with regards to both the stance and the slight colour change. I'm not 100% sold on the blue eyes, but that's just personal preference I guess.
ignore the text in the image, just googled and grabbed the first example I found.
[edit] just to elaborate, notice how the black part of the eye is just below the eye lid and the blue part is just at the bottom. that's what you want.
Skillstrenghtorluck: Thank you! I'm glad you like it
BradMyers82: You're right about the eyes! Thanks for pointing that out. Her pupil is also too small, I'll fix that!
Let me know what you think of the lighting, shaders,etc
I also did some quick tests with other eye colors. Which one do you like the most?
Secondly; I vote green eyes!
The reason I ask is I was having shadows issues and found out my scale was wrong and that was why. It will cause a lot of issues actually if your scale is off.
Liking the green eyes with the brown specs in. Nice touch.
BradMyers82: Thanks for your advice! Actually, the option ''Non modulated Self Shadowing'' was unchecked on my light :P It works now!
skillstrengthorluck: Thanks!
I will call these images final, but I'm still open to criticism, if there are quick things I can fix
Thanks a lot to those who helped me with this character!!