Lana Love - Pinup in Space

Texelion

Yay ! I finally found some time to finish this pinup ( started in septmeber 2012, *sigh* ). Well I'm better at doing faces now but I didn't find the courage to redo the head... As she is skinned and rigged I will shot other poses later ^^.

Any comment will be useful for my next work.

Grimm_Wrecking

I dig it man!

Sorry no crits just props.

WadeWT

I really like this, I'm not so much a fan of the lighting, though. so much is in shadow and it just looks a bit too dark overall. I think the green you used for her costume could use a bit more saturation. Near the feet in your screenshots you've got a green light or something which makes the green of her costume look much nicer. I think if you tried to match that in your texture it'd look ace. Also her gun looks a bit out of place. I like it as a standalone piece, but next to the model it just looks too flat. There's lots of nice curves all over your model - data ass, dat hair, dat helmet, and then the gun just ends up looking kind of flat in comparison. These are all small things, though, I think you did an awesome job!

Dimfist

I agree with Wade. I would bump up the saturation of the greens as they do seem a little flat in this lighting scheme.
Very cool idea and model!

thatanimator

very fancy way of presenting the wire! good idea!!

Shiniku

Looks awesome, I love this!

mazz423

Looks great, although personally I think you could maybe do with making your metals slightly more, well, metallic. Right now though they're looking a little dull to me, upping their specular intensity would help I think.

Just something totally nit-picky though, and other than that I think it looks great as is.

Texelion

WadeWT wrote: »

I really like this, I'm not so much a fan of the lighting, though. so much is in shadow and it just looks a bit too dark overall. I think the green you used for her costume could use a bit more saturation. Near the feet in your screenshots you've got a green light or something which makes the green of her costume look much nicer. I think if you tried to match that in your texture it'd look ace. Also her gun looks a bit out of place. I like it as a standalone piece, but next to the model it just looks too flat. There's lots of nice curves all over your model - data ass, dat hair, dat helmet, and then the gun just ends up looking kind of flat in comparison. These are all small things, though, I think you did an awesome job!

Thanks for the crit, I agree. However I have a new monitor which is pretty bright and saturated so the lighting is not dark at all.

For the gun I really wanted to do a classical "retro-futuristic" gun as me generally see in pinup illustration, and then I changed my mind... I will do one with more curves when I find the time, I don't really like this one.

I will do some other shots with other poses later so I could make the changes.

@Mazz423 : totally agree with you, I textured evrything previewing in Marmoset,, but then I was unable to put the helmet on top of the eyelashes and sunglasses, because marmoset can't show two layers of transparency properly. So I went in UDK, and here my spec and gloss don't look the same at all, I tried to tweak that in the shader with some multiply nodes, but I can't have the exact same metallic look than in marmo... I'll try to find some tutos...

Thanks for the comments guys, appreciated.

Di$array

Hey Texelion, Gotta say I really like your new piece. Fun, bubbly and a nice healthy dose of Barbarella influence. Most of the guys above pointed out a few problems. Mostly the lighting and spec maps for the metal.

Personally I'd lose the angles of the model which are deep in shadow for a nice 50/50 between the light and shadow.

sheckee

Great piece! I really like her, I do echo a lot of the previous critique; but here's something that bothers me about the posing. The way her legs are posed reads strange from the Front view at a glance. It feels like the foot going behind is actually going in front. Here's a redline to hopefully explain it better than I can in words!

MarvinJC

Great character!congrats.

Texelion

sheckee wrote: »

Great piece! I really like her, I do echo a lot of the previous critique; but here's something that bothers me about the posing. The way her legs are posed reads strange from the Front view at a glance. It feels like the foot going behind is actually going in front. Here's a redline to hopefully explain it better than I can in words!

Yeah I saw that when I put the screens together, totally agree with you, I didn't take the best angle... and I was too lazy to do another shot ^^. I'll do better for the next poses, I promise...