First ever Character!/RockScene

Armanguy

Hey guys this was in work in progress section but i didn't get any real crit's on it kinda got lost in the shuffle of amazing work. so i decided to post it here, i think im done with the model but ill hold off until i get some crits if not ill start texturing this bad boy.



ill also update this page with the rock scene il be putting this guy in i am a level artist so every character i make has to get some level art :P

Jonas Ronnegard

i think it would be easier to crit if we had a wire to look at.

ElysiumGX

wow. that guy totally rocks.

notman

His arms seem short and it's hard to tell if there is something odd about the shoulders or if it's the angle. Wires would definitely help.

Otherwise I think he's looking pretty good.

Armanguy

Armanguy

update on the scene:

Armanguy

update crtis need on the guitar:

breakneck

usually guitars with the 3 pickup style have atleast 3 knobs and one toggle switch to toggle between the pickups. also they use a lighter colored wood for the neck stock(not the fretboard - thats dark mahogany i think), unless the darker color goes with your design.

Tom Burns

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usually guitars with the 3 pickup style have atleast 3 knobs and one toggle switch to toggle between the pickups. also they use a lighter colored wood for the neck stock(not the fretboard - thats dark mahogany i think), unless the darker color goes with your design.

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I was going to say exactly the same thing.

Aside from those technical points, I'd add that the tuning keys need to be rotated all at different angles because it's almost impossible to have them all line up at exactly the same angle and still be in tune (but that's a pretty minor point).

The amplifier looks very believable. So good job on those things, Armanguy!

As for your character, I' suggest that bend near the top of the tie looks a bit too sharp. Try lessening that sharp bend and you've got yourself a totally 80's-type rock guy!

Tom

Armanguy

setting up the scene:

Xaltar

looking good on the prop side.

Your guitar looks like a Fender strat, needs a tone control (another round knob) and a pickup selection lever. SOME guitars have 3 knobs but a strat like the one here has 2.

Armanguy

worked on the render a little what does everyone think?

pliang

I think some nice spotlight setup to show off the props would be better than the current setup...

oobersli

if your just showing off the props, then I'd lose the scene. they don't really go together well. Focus on getting more upclose shots of the props. do you have bump on the guitar?

Armanguy

yeah i do have a bump.

Jeremy Wright

It only has to have one knob. Since the guitar doesn't have any name on the headstock, we can take it to be a custom-homemade guitar. The best guitarist I've ever known in person was a deathmetal guy who had a homemade guitar that had only one knob. It had one pickup, one volume knob and that's it.

Also, you can get by with no selector switch if you have more than one output jack (a seperate one for each pickup). If you wanted to run your guitar to more than one amp you could do this. You could use a splitter, but if you want two different distinct sounds going to each amp, you would wire a specific pickup to each jack. I don't see this working for more than two pickups, though (one wired to the top mounted jack and a second wired to a side jack)

You need to either add a selctor switch of some kind if you're going to have more than one pickup, or only have one pickup.

breakneck

its an HSS setup (humbucker, single, single) add a toggle switch! - also it doesn't read as a homemade guitar, rather a very standard fender strat - which has 3 knobs. . .. .we could say this stuff for ever. . .

Jeremy Wright

It's doesn't say Fender, so it's a strat copy. A custom/homemade guitar can look very standard in body shape: http://www.warmoth.com/guitar/bodies/strat.cfm

I'm not trying to argue here, but if the kid only wants to have one knob, he only needs one knob. I totally agree he needs the selector switch.

Jeremy Lindstrom

Your brick texture doesn't tile and has a pretty nasty seam there on the right hand side, and the same seam is on the left side too..

Also might be good to take 5 minutes and make a stand for the guitar.