This is excellent. Here's a paintover to take as you will... could just be me. My main two crits are the hair and lumps above the eyebrows. Instead of raking the hair, I think it would be fine to sculpt asymmetrical forms with a bit of detail at the hairline and along the top, and between forms; otherwise, it looks…
looking cool man, but I agree with you its not there yet. This too has a cartoony look to it, and I think it probably is because you have proportions of certain things slightly off. It's really hard to put my finger on it without having your specific reference and a high resolution comparison, but one area I think that…