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How can I improve this render?

samarth7523
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Any suggestions on this render? Posing is weird, if there are any suggestions on the pose I would really appreciate that.
Thanks.

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  • Eric Chadwick
    In the movie, perhaps the most dramatic pose in this scene is when they are trying to get back to this ship, struggling against the viscosity of the water.

    Ship seems untextured.

    Robot should be placed elsewhere, since it is merging with the silhouette of the ship, and thus it's difficult to read.

    Composition-wise the ship is uncomfortably close to the left edge, while the character has an uncomfortably-wide margin on the right. We have some guides on composition here that might help you! http://wiki.polycount.com/wiki/Concept_Fundamentals#Composition
  • samarth7523
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    samarth7523 polycounter lvl 4
    In the movie, perhaps the most dramatic pose in this scene is when they are trying to get back to this ship, struggling against the viscosity of the water.

    Ship seems untextured.

    Robot should be placed elsewhere, since it is merging with the silhouette of the ship, and thus it's difficult to read.

    Composition-wise the ship is uncomfortably close to the left edge, while the character has an uncomfortably-wide margin on the right. We have some guides on composition here that might help you! http://wiki.polycount.com/wiki/Concept_Fundamentals#Composition

    Thanks for critiques. Applied the critiques you mentioned (except for the pose, will probably work on that next) focusing on the environment. And also some critiques other people gave me. 

    First Version:

    Second Version:

  • Eric Chadwick
    I would greatly reduce the fog, and show the wave coming soon. Do you want drama, or relaxation?

    You could have the astronaut either facing the camera, or running towards the craft.



     


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