Hello Everyone! First Post in need of feedback and advice! Thanks in advance
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I've had a rocky road the last few years dealing with life but I'm finally having the ability to put forth the effort to get better so I would love the help you guys could give me. This is the link to the animation....I know there are some penetration issues to be addressed but any feedback is welcome so long as I can correct upon it..so thanks in advance! I can't wait to get to you guys here!
https://syncsketch.com/sketch/164898#202458
https://syncsketch.com/sketch/164898#202458
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When his expression changes from one of pride to confusion, it feels like there's a lot of unnecessary head movement, he also ends up leaning back in his chair even more, which makes him look more relaxed, despite his facial expression. I'd say keep this movement simpler with some squash and stretch on his expressions, followed a more a more frantic and paniced attempt to press Ctrl+Z (Which is what I assume he's doing at frame 239)
Finally when the hand comes out of the computer screen, our main character seems more inconvenienced and annoyed rather than scared and confused, which is what I would be if my drawing came to life and tried to attack me! When the fight starts, it needs to look like more of a struggle, rather than trying to swat away a pesky fly or something.
The animation itself is looking good so far, the acting just needs to be clearer and more consistent.
When his expression shifts, have his screen glow, maybe add some lightning effects to the outside of his monitor to show something not quite right happening. It's all staging, it's important to get your staging right if the idea you're going for isn't immediately apparent, we need to be able to piece everything together and come to a concrete conclusion.
If you want a more comedic struggle, really exaggerate that last fight, have his limbs flail about and stretch all cartoon-like, make him jump out of his chair a little at the start, all that good stuff. Keep his expression scared, but make it kind of silly as well, maybe have a part where the characters tug against one another aggressively before the main character gets knocked out with the slap.
It's honestly just the little things, your idea and execution are great, it's just lost in translation a little. Pay attention to the notes being left on your sync sketch as well. Good luck!
oh Happy Fourth by the way!
oh almost forgot the link:
https://syncsketch.com/sketch/166026#204388
Better animation overall. A lot smoother. Better reactions imo.
I think some things to work on could be:
- he has a very intense reaction to his good drawing. When i do something i particularly enjoy, i may just find myself smiling and relaxing at it, but not necessarily having his reaction. The character seems to really throw himself back with pride, which seemed like too big of a reaction to me. Maybe just simplify it and look at what you do when you complete a work. Probably something more subtle.
- His frightened reaction to the hand is much better! Loved the update. But it seems very drawn out. He kinda freaks out once, calms himself, and then really freaks and faints. I presume the second freak out was possibly for comedic effect, but it seemed odd.
check out this video of a compilation of fainting scenes i found on youtube and make notes as to what they are doing. (
- what i observed was that they seem to be kinda confused and still right before fainting. Your character seems to do the opposite by flailing right before fainting. (Exaggerated doesnt always make it comedic. Good acting is not overdoing it.)
- take a look at 0:40 in the video where thr girl faints after the woman says "you look like you've seen a ghost". I think this applies very well to you. This girl is initially very startled,(just like your character), and then is "calm" for a second, then faints.
Remember that references are your friends!
I'll get to addressing that stuff today. I think maybe I can tone down the breathing maybe? the idea was that he is backed into the corner and can do nothing but face it, fearfully, but the hand ultimately slaps him and knocks him out. Alas, it's not reading now lol.
I will hold on to that reference though. Believe it or not, I have a hard drive that is specifically for inspiration and reference so I shall place that with the rest hehe. Thanks again for all your help!
https://syncsketch.com/sketch/168441#208080
there is still much to do in terms of polish but I think this is the idea I'm going with and if it's terrible I may just move on like you said, but man was it fun though still. There is a lot of things I need to cleanup like penetrations and such but I'll get around to it when I'm feeling better.