Remove the outlines or clean them up. You have nice line weight in the sketch on your tumblr page, but this version has blurry lines of a mostly uniform weight. If you want to keep the lines, place the heaviest line weight around the silhouette and thinner lines around large pieces inside like underneath the chest piece and around the shoulder pads etc. Use thin lines to add small details that aren't part of a silhouette.
It could use more contrast. Lighten the highlights and darken the shadows.
The robot is more interesting from the back than from the front.
The head seams like an afterthought. The rest of the features are much more thought out and interesting than the head.
Ah man. You are totally right about the line weight; I cant believe I forgot that.
One of my struggles with this concept was trying to walk the line between form and function. I made the front with more flat broad plating because of the the whole incoming projectile thing but now I am thinking that was not the best idea.
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Remove the outlines or clean them up. You have nice line weight in the sketch on your tumblr page, but this version has blurry lines of a mostly uniform weight. If you want to keep the lines, place the heaviest line weight around the silhouette and thinner lines around large pieces inside like underneath the chest piece and around the shoulder pads etc. Use thin lines to add small details that aren't part of a silhouette.
It could use more contrast. Lighten the highlights and darken the shadows.
The robot is more interesting from the back than from the front.
The head seams like an afterthought. The rest of the features are much more thought out and interesting than the head.
Cheers!
Ah man. You are totally right about the line weight; I cant believe I forgot that.
One of my struggles with this concept was trying to walk the line between form and function. I made the front with more flat broad plating because of the the whole incoming projectile thing but now I am thinking that was not the best idea.