Hello Green, awesome work!! I have some notes ( just my opinion , just grab what it helps you )
- The "Move on" doesn't read , maybe you should start the shot with the M shape on his mouth then moving to an O. - It feels strange that the upper body have a good amount of movement but his legs are pretty locked on place , try to add some animation to them just to feel that his whole body is connected. - In the "exist" I think that you can accentuate it more between the E ( close it more) and S shapes. - The screen right hand is a little distracting since it feels more like a pop , the movement is fast. I think that the shot can be with his both hands already on his lap. - The fist at -exist- feels too CG , I suggest you take out a little bit some fingers just to give the fist a better form and not like a default fist hand . - The face is awesome just a couple of notes on the eyes , sometimes it feels a little weird that eye ----> , like in the beginning the eye goes a little bit out.
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- The "Move on" doesn't read , maybe you should start the shot with the M shape on his mouth then moving to an O.
- It feels strange that the upper body have a good amount of movement but his legs are pretty locked on place , try to add some animation to them just to feel that his whole body is connected.
- In the "exist" I think that you can accentuate it more between the E ( close it more) and S shapes.
- The screen right hand is a little distracting since it feels more like a pop , the movement is fast. I think that the shot can be with his both hands already on his lap.
- The fist at -exist- feels too CG , I suggest you take out a little bit some fingers just to give the fist a better form and not like a default fist hand
- The face is awesome
Good work
Though I kindof left this shot alone for now. Planning to work on allot of other shots with my time atm.