3D W.I.P Short Film ( Need Feedback )

Karimelhann

Hi everyone,
I post my advancement on this forum to have constructive critics to change what needs to be changed. So for this project I'm working on Maya 2017 the final rendering of my short footage will be done on Arnold. I showed my main character to one of my teachers and he told me to change the thumb and make the thighs look a little fatter. I Have some rendres of my scene ( done a 80% ).

Karimelhann

I modified he's pants to make he's thighs look bigger and he's thumb.

Karimelhann

Modified my scene and highlighted my lamp by putting a gods ray above.

Karimelhann

Allright so here i changed some small details in my scene like the floor, the rocks on the wall and the roots.

Arturow

Going well!! My only tip would be to not make your scene too dark , we need to be able to see a clear silhouette in the character or notice his expression <--- this all depends on the vibe and the story of course :P

Karimelhann

thanks Arturow you're not the only one that said that so i'm going to change that and make it a little bit lighter.

penOr

I'd like to play this game purely based on the look, I'd say that's a success

Karimelhann

haha thanks penOr but its not a game i'm working on, i'm working on a short film

Karimelhann

Hi, guys longtime in didn't post anything here.
Here are some renders i'm starting the animation tomorrow enjoy cc welcome !

HeXiFy

It looks really cool so far, I'm loving the scene setup.. Great job on making the lighting changes, it really looks better. I can't wait for the animation to be posted. Keep us updated. Also a few tips before you start, you probably already know this, but if you don't; here you go... please don't have that weird creepy smile on his face when you animate, it's like a weird creepy neutral smile.. Better placement of his fingers since they're not touching anything on the left. Good luck!

Karimelhann

Hahahaha don't worry i will do some better facial expression thanks for your opinion and critics

Karimelhann

Hello guys here is my finished Short Film "Thief"
Enjoy and tell me what you guys think about this !
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oa0e8EuLhhU

Karimelhann

HeXiFy

The rendering looks nice, did you stay true to using Arnold? I wish you would have posted the animation for critiques to get it looking better. He looks way too stiff and movement is quite off, missing the principles of animation. All in all, it's a good layout and idea.

Karimelhann

Yeah I used Arnold for everything. You right for the animation I was running out of time but I can a shure you my next movie is going to bang hard!